The maps below show the city Nelson in 2000 and its current one.
The maps compare the layout of Nelson in the years 2000 and now. In general, the city has developed in several ways, with the introduction of some facilities and the reconstruction of a few. It’s also clear that, while overall facilities were improved, Nelson also includes more citizens.
Turning to details, in 2000 there was not a permanent population at all, with only the city center situated in the middle of the city. The highway separated the port, a port that didn’t have any amenities. On the other side of the motorway, three old markets were located near the city center, and to the north side of it, there was an old train station. In addition, Nelson included a university, which was adjacent to a bunch of trees.
By now, Nelson has experienced several outstanding transformations. One of the main changes is the construction of restaurants and “bars and clubs” in the area of the port. The old highway for cars has been transformed into the path for pedestrians only. On the left-hand side of the university, a new hall of residence has been built, while on the right-hand side, a brand new shopping center has been constructed with the removal of trees, meaning the city has been attracting many people and owning permanent citizens. On the other hand, an old train station has been removed, and a new one is located in front of the city center. As for the city center, it has organized a bike rental scheme throughout the city. Also, both sides of the city have covered new shops and new covered markets.
The essay maintains a logical flow, comparing the two maps effectively. However, transitions between ideas could be smoother.
Suggestions
- Use more linking words to connect ideas.
- Ensure each paragraph focuses on a single aspect of change.
- Avoid abrupt transitions between different topics.
The essay uses a range of vocabulary with some precision, though there are occasional inaccuracies.
The essay demonstrates a fair range of grammatical structures, but there are errors that sometimes obscure meaning.
The essay addresses the task effectively, comparing key changes in the maps. However, some details could be more explicitly described.
Suggestions
- Include more specific details about changes.
- Ensure all significant map features are covered.