The maps demonstrate a present view of an office building and how it will look in the future with several developments.
The maps demonstrate a present view of an office building and how it will look in the future with several developments.
Overall, the establishment saw a drastic transformation, resulting in larger rooms and additional areas. It is also worth mentioning that the most significant alteration was the disappearance of grasses on both sides of the building and the relocation of the entrance along with the reception.
Looking at the map as described in the present, there is an entrance on the left side of the building, along which are a few offices lined towards the west. There are now two grasslands, long in size, both the left and right parts of the office. Heading to the north, there are three rooms, namely the kitchen on the left, the canteen in the middle and the stock room on the right, with a restroom below the stock room.
Looking at the proposed developments for the office, the entrance is estimated to relocate to the centre between two offices on the bottom of the building. Another potential change will be the appearance of a meeting area, where there is now a grass area in the easter part, while the latter grassland will be probably turned into an outdoor seating area. Interestingly, two offices are now at the bottom of the map and are planned to relocate to the top of the building. A new coffee machine is also estimated to appear above the meeting area along with WCs. The only room that will remain unchanged, however, is the Stock room.
The essay generally follows a logical structure and uses cohesive devices, but there are some areas where the flow can be improved.
Suggestions
- Use clearer transitions between paragraphs.
- Ensure each paragraph has a clear central idea.
The essay demonstrates a good range of vocabulary with some precise word choices, but there is room for improvement in variety.
The essay shows a variety of sentence structures, but there are some grammatical inaccuracies that need correction.
The essay adequately addresses the task and describes the maps, but some details could be more precise.
Suggestions
- Include more specific details about the changes.
- Ensure all major changes are clearly described.