The maps illustrate changes in bookstore' plan from 2000 to the present da.
The two maps show how the layout of the bookstore has changed from 2000 to the present day.
Overall, the number of facilities of the bookstore have expanded, while most of them have remained intact. It is also clear that several table have been constructed and a new café has been built at the expense of the non-fiction area throughout the timeframe.
In 2000, there were three places in the southern and the southeast parts of the bookstore. A huge non-fiction sector took place at the bottom of the map and the other places, including new books and service desk stood together on the left of the non-fiction. The cookery, the hobbies and the art fields stood as back-to-back in the center of the bookstore, on the top of them was the first fiction room towards from west to north. The last, another fiction room was in the northeast side of the bookstore, whereas the travel and the entrance took place in west part.
Fast-forward to the current day, non-fiction area has been converted into the cafe, while new books and service desk sectors have not seen any alterations. Then, a triple place has been extended and relocated to the north where the former fiction place used to locate. Its size has been cut. The rest of places, travel sector – another fiction room and the entrance have been kept unchanged.
The essay is logically organized and uses a range of cohesive devices appropriately. However, there are a few areas where the use of these devices could be improved for better flow and coherence.
Suggestions
- Consider using more varied linking words to connect your ideas and sentences.
- Ensure that each paragraph has a clear central topic and that all sentences in the paragraph relate to this topic.
The essay uses a good range of vocabulary and there is evidence of less common and idiomatic language. However, there are a few instances of awkward or incorrect word choice.
The essay makes use of a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, and the majority of sentences are error-free. However, there are a few grammatical errors that affect the clarity of the writing.
The essay addresses all parts of the task and presents a clear overview of the information provided. The essay also makes clear and appropriate comparisons where relevant. However, the essay could be improved by providing more detailed explanations and analysis of the data.
Suggestions
- Try to provide more detailed explanations and analysis of the data. This could involve discussing the reasons for the changes or the impact of the changes on the bookstore.