The maps show the changes in the village of Wells-on-the-Water in the UK between 1985 and 2010.
The maps illustrate how one specific village – Wells-on-the-Water – in the UK changed from 1985 to 2010. Overall, the village was mainly specialized in farming; however, it became community-oriented with the construction of houses, shops and a park. Furthermore, the town became more accessible with the expansion of roads, although some parts remained untouched.
In 1985, the village had only agricultural use. There was an old factory, which was surrounded by roads, to the left, under which was a farm house. Next to the farm house was a post office, where people can get through “mansion lane” road. Two big buildings – Mansion garden and mansion house – occupied the center of the map, to the right of which was the River Wells. The other parts of the village were plain and grassy, with a number of trees, where livestock, such as sheep and hens, can be grazed.
However, the area had undergone a lot of changes by 2010, shifting its focus from agricultural purpose to residential one. The place which previously was occupied by old factory, was transformed into luxury flats. Central part of the village did not see many alterations, with mansion gardens staying untouched and mansion house was being repurposed to care home. Moving to the bottom side, park was constructed instead of farm house, yet nearby post office was still there to use. Shops, houses and an additional post office were introduced to the place; however, they came at the expense of green zone, leading to the disappearance of farmland. Lastly, the road network was expanded to improve the access throughout the village.
The essay is logically structured with clear progression. However, some sentences could be more clearly connected, and transitions between paragraphs could be smoother.
Suggestions
- Use more linking words to improve flow.
- Ensure each paragraph has a clear topic sentence.
- Improve transitions between ideas.
The vocabulary used is appropriate and varied, but some words and phrases are repeated or could be more precise.
The essay demonstrates a good range of grammatical structures, but there are noticeable errors in sentence construction and verb tense.
The essay effectively addresses the task, providing a clear overview and detailed descriptions of changes. Some details could be more precise.
Suggestions
- Include more specific details about changes in the map.
- Ensure all significant changes are mentioned.