The maps shows the layout of Felixstone in 1967 and 2001. Report and compare where relevant
The maps illustrate the transformation of Felixstone between 1967 and 2001.
Overall, while Felixstone retained many of its features, it expanded its facilities, including car park, public, and private beach. Of particular note was the introduction of resort areas, where farmland used to be.
In 1967, Felixstone reflected rural areas. Coming straight to the coast via pier, there was a marina and a boat, and the fish market on the south-east side. On the left from the pier, Felixstone had amenities like a cafe, hotel, and a few greenery with dunes. On the other side of the highway, farmland was located in the East, beside which were multi-storey twin shops with high street between them. Golf course was in the northern west quarter.
By 2001, where pier and fish market were, there had been a private beach and to the left from it public beach had opened. Wind turbines had been installed near dunes to provide with energy and more greenery appeared. One of the twin buildings, more accurately, right one was replaced with apartments and high street between them remained, while shops on the left side extended. A place – upper right side – farmland used to be, had undergone modernization. Swimming pool and a new hotel had been constructed along with 2 tennis at the back. At the same time, golf course, cafe, and hotel had been preserved, with the addition of car park to the hotel.
The essay is logically organized and uses a range of cohesive devices appropriately. However, there are a few areas where the use of cohesive devices could be improved for better flow and clarity.
Suggestions
- Consider using more varied transitional phrases to introduce new points or to make comparisons or contrasts.
- Ensure that each paragraph has a clear central topic and that all sentences within the paragraph relate to this topic.
The essay demonstrates a good range of vocabulary and uses some less common and idiomatic language. However, there are a few instances of awkward or incorrect word choice.
The essay demonstrates a good range of grammatical structures and is generally accurate. However, there are a few minor errors that could be addressed.
The essay provides a detailed comparison of the two maps and describes the changes that occurred between 1967 and 2001. The writer addresses all parts of the task and provides a clear and well-developed response.
Suggestions
- Ensure that you clearly distinguish between the different areas of the map and provide a separate description for each. This will help to avoid confusion and ensure that your writing is well-organized and easy to follow.