the number of religious and civil marriages, as well as average age of bride and bridegroom between 1960 and 2000.
The table provides information about the number of religious and civil marriages, as well as the average age of bride and bridegroom between 1960 and 2000.
Overall, what stands out from the graph is that there was a significant upward trend in the number of civil marriages while a substantial fall was the case in religious marriages during the given span. As time went by, both men and women got married at relatively older ages.
Looking at details, religious marriages accounted for 42000 in the beginning, making five times as high as the initial number of civil marriages. After this, it constantly increased by 4000 per decade, reaching 50000 in 1980, which was the biggest figure throughout the whole period, before declining sharply till 36000 in 2000. As for civil marriages, despite being the least popular choice in 1960, it experienced a five-fold increase, finishing at 40000 in 2000, surpassing religious marriages.
the average ages of marriages for males and females were 23 and 21 respectively in 1960. Following this, the numbers rose almost constantly by 2 every decade, constituting 31 and 30 in turn at the end of the period.
The essay is generally well-organized but lacks smooth transitions between some ideas.
Suggestions
- Use linking words to improve flow.
- Ensure each paragraph has a clear central idea.
- Connect data points more clearly.
The essay uses a range of vocabulary, though some phrases could be more precise.
The essay demonstrates a good range of grammatical structures, but some sentences could be more accurately constructed.
The essay effectively summarizes the main trends and makes relevant comparisons, but some details could be more precise.
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- Provide more specific data points.
- Ensure all data from the table is accurately represented.