the number of visitors who visited the 3 locations in europian countries in a 20- year period
The line graph demonstrates the count of tourists who were visited to three various places in Europe over a 20-year period.
In general, the figures for tourists who travelled to the coast and the mountains increased over the years, albeit to a varying degree, while the number of visitors’ in the lakes experienced the opposite trend by the end.
Turning to details, the total number of visitors in the lakes had a starting point of 10 thousand. These figure went up, remarkably growing up to 40 thousand upon the arrival of 1997, after which it reached a peak at around 75 thousand after 5 years. Furthermore, the number of tourists in the lakes saw its figure fall to 50 thousand at the end of a period.
Coming to the share of visitors in the coast and the mountains, both increased in this period of time. With the respect to the number of people who were visited the coats they kept somehow different courses compared to that of people in the mountains. At the beginning of a period the coast’s figures saw a dip to its initial standing in 1992 before reducing to by far the lowest point 35 thousand. However, this figure bucked the trend by almost 40 thousand in 2007. Furthermore, the figures for mountains had a slight and steady increase from 20 thousand to approximately 35 thousand between 1987 and 2007.
The essay is logically organized and presents a clear overview of the data. However, there are some issues with the flow of information and the use of cohesive devices.
Suggestions
- Use a variety of cohesive devices to improve the flow of information.
- Ensure that each paragraph has a clear central topic and that all sentences in the paragraph relate to this topic.
The essay uses a range of vocabulary and there is some evidence of less common and idiomatic language. However, there are a few awkward or incorrect word choices.
The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, and there are only minor errors. However, there is room for improvement in terms of grammatical accuracy and the use of punctuation.
The essay provides a clear overview of the data and makes some relevant comparisons. However, the essay could be improved by providing more detailed analysis and by making more specific comparisons.
Suggestions
- Provide a more detailed analysis of the data and make more specific comparisons.
- Use a wider range of structures to discuss the data.