The percentage of volunteers by sectors in 2008 and 2014
The pie charts illustrate the proportions of volunteers from various organizations between 2008 and 2014.
Overall, the percentages of volunteers from the environmental and healthcare sectors observed an increase, while the remaining four organizations showed the lowest performance. Another interesting point is that healthcare, despite being lower than other sectors, showed significantly higher percentages toward the later period.
In detail, the preferences for specific organizations among volunteers in healthcare, sport, and the environment rose differently over six years. Specifically, the educational, environmental, and sports sectors attracted 24%, 21%, and 18% of volunteers in 2008, respectively. By the next period, apart from environmental organizations, all organizations witnessed significant decreases of about 8% and 12%.
Similarly, the art and other sectors comprised about 15% in 2008. By the next period, both saw some decline, approximately 12% and 9%. While the healthcare organization showed the lowest rate in 2008, by 2014, the percentage of volunteers was much higher, at about 25%.
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