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The pictures show information about average income and spending on food and clothes by an average family in a city in the UK.

The diagrams illustrate how the earnings of a typical UK citizen changed from 2010 to 2013, along with their expenditures on five different items. Overall, while the expenditure rates exhibited a slight increase, the amount of salary portrayed an overall decrease during the given period. Notably, spending rates on fruit and vegetables and dairy products rose, whereas the amount of money directed to meat and fish and clothes fell. These changes exclude the category of other food, whose indication remained the same.
To start with, the table shows that an average UK citizen’s earning was at 29.000 pounds, and they spent about half of this sum on food and clothes. However, by 2013, the spending rates had grown to 15.000 pounds, 1.000 pounds up from the previous figure. Negatively, the amount of salary dropped by 4.000 pounds.
Looking closely at the information for spending patterns in 2010, the fruit and vegetable, coupled with meat and fish categories, comprised more than half the salary of an average person. With respective shares at 29% and 26%, both categories represented a collective expenditure of 55%. This was significantly larger in comparison to the expenses made in other categories; other food (18%), clothes (15%) and dairy products (12%).
The three-year analysis showed changes of varying degrees in all categories, with the exception of other food. There was an increase of 4 percentage points in the amount of money allocated to fruit and vegetables along with dairy products. Conversely, meat and fish category exhibited a fall of 6 percentage points, whereas clothes section saw a drop of a meager 2 percentage points.

7.0

The essay is generally well-organized with a clear progression of ideas. However, some sentences could be more logically connected to enhance flow.

Suggestions
  • Use more linking words to improve the flow between sentences.
  • Ensure each paragraph has a clear central idea.
  • Avoid abrupt transitions between different data points.

The essay uses a good range of vocabulary with some less common words. However, there are occasional inaccuracies.

The essay demonstrates a good range of grammatical structures with occasional errors.

The essay effectively addresses the task, providing a clear overview and detailed comparisons. However, some data points could be more explicitly referenced.

Suggestions
  • Include more specific data from the diagrams to support statements.
  • Ensure all relevant data points are clearly mentioned.