The pie char below show the most common advantages and disadvantages of Rairmont Island, according to a survey of visitors.
The pie charts shows the most common advantages and disadvantages of Fairmont Island according to a survey of visitors.
The most common advantages are the people, the scenery, good accommodation, and the culture. The people are the most liked aspect, making up thirty-five percent. The scenery is the second most popular, with thirty percent of visitors mentioning it. Good accommodation is also important, being chosen by twenty percent of people, while culture is the least common advantage, at fifteen percent.
For disadvantages, the survey shows the weather, high cost of living, entertainment, and food quality. The weather is the biggest problem, as thirty-five percent of visitors chose it. High cost of living comes next, mentioned by thirty percent. Entertainment is a smaller issue, at twenty percent, while food quality is the least mentioned disadvantage, at fifteen percent.
Overall, the survey shows that the people and the scenery are the main advantages, but the weather and high costs are the main problems for visitors to Fairmont Island.
The essay is logically organized and presents a clear overview of the information. The advantages and disadvantages are clearly separated, and the information is presented in a logical order. However, there are a few instances where the flow of information could be improved.
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- Use more cohesive devices to improve the flow of information.
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The essay uses a good range of vocabulary and there is evidence of less common and idiomatic language. However, there are a few instances of awkward or incorrect word choice.
The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms and there are few grammatical errors. However, there are a few instances where the choice of grammatical constructions could be improved.
The essay provides a clear overview of the information and presents key features and significant trends. The information is accurately and appropriately selected and well supported.
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- Ensure that you fully address all parts of the task and that your writing is directly relevant to the task.