The pie charts below show preferred social media channels for youth in the United Kingdom.
The three charts provide five preferred social media platforms for young people in United Kingdom from 2010 to 2012.
Overall, it is clear that, although Facebook mantained its spot as the majoritie’s favourite platform, its figure decreased considerable during time, while all the other four platforms grew, especially Google and Linkedin. Pinterest figured as the least favourite channel.
Facebook was choosen by 59% of UK’s youth in 2010, but dropped to half next year and finalized as the preferred channel of 1/3 of young people. Meanwhile, Google experiensed the biggest growth, going from 5% to 14%, almost tripling its figures. Linkedin also faced growth, starting with 10% and ending with 15%.
Twitter was always the second preferred platform and had a stable 2% anual growth, going from 21% in 2010 to a quarter in 2012. As with Pinterest, despite rising its proportions through time, it remained the least picked channel, figuring under one-tenth in all 3 years.
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