The pie charts below show the most common advantages and disadvantages of Fairmont Island according to a survey of visitors. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
According to survey of Fairmont, the proportion of most common benefits and drawbacks of Fairmont are shown in the pie charts.
Overall, payment for living is the most common drawback while quality of meal is the least common one. Adding percentages of weather and entertainment together equals to another half of the pie. Most common advantage is the people while the lowest good apartment.
The most common disadvantage is expensiveness of apartments by 45% and the lowest one is quality of meals, the sum of two components is 50% or half of the chart. According to survey there are also 2 downsides, such as, weather by 20% and entertainment by 30% and also the sum of 2 components equals to another half of the chart.
The most common benefit is people by 40% while the lowest one is good housing by 11%, but the advantage of the culture is a bit more than the good housing, the culture by 12, in addition the benefit of landscape is less by 3 than advantages of the people.
The essay presents information in a somewhat organized manner. However, the use of linking words and phrases is limited, and there is some repetition in the structure.
Suggestions
- Use a wider range of linking words to connect ideas.
- Avoid repetition by varying sentence structures.
- Ensure each paragraph has a clear focus.
The vocabulary used is adequate but lacks variety. There are some inaccuracies in word choice.
There are some grammatical errors and awkward phrasings. Sentence structures are mostly simple, with limited complexity.
The essay addresses the task but lacks detailed comparisons and fails to summarize all key features effectively.
Suggestions
- Include more detailed comparisons between advantages and disadvantages.
- Summarize all key features from the charts.