The pie charts below show the percentage of students on the one adult education center taking a various course offered in 1985 and this year.

The two pie charts show the proportion of students taking different courses on one adult education center in 1985 and this year. Overall, there have been notable changes in course popularity, with the introduction of IT courses and a decline in interest for some traditional subjects.
In 1985, modern languages were the most popular course, with 24% of students enrolled. Fitness and dance followed close at 22%, while local history and art courses attracted 15% and 17%, respectively. Cookery accounted for 14%, and music appreciation was the least popular, with only 8% of students choosing it.
This year, IT has becomes the most popular course, accounting for 27% of enrollments, despite not being offered in 1985. Fitness and dance retained their share at 22%, while cookery increased slightly to 19%. However, modern languages dropped to 17%, and art courses saw a small decrease to 15%. Music appreciation is no longer offe
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The essay is logically organized and ideas are connected well. However, there are a few areas where the flow of information could be improved.

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Use a variety of cohesive devices to improve the flow of information.
Consider using more complex sentence structures to introduce the data.

The essay uses a good range of vocabulary and there is evidence of less common and idiomatic language. However, there are a few instances of awkward or incorrect word choice.

The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms and there are only minor errors. However, there are a few instances of incorrect verb tense or form.

The essay addresses all parts of the task and presents a clear overview of the main trends, differences or stages. However, the essay could be improved by providing more specific details and examples.