The pie charts compare how much energy UK consumed in 2000 and 2010.
The pie charts compare what percentage of energy UK consumed in 2000 and 2010.
Looking from an overall perspective, it is readily apparent that all the categories experienced an increase except for the petrol. It is also clear that most of the energy consumed by citizens were gas and colar, while two categories, namely, solar and other saw an increase, albeit minimally.
In 2000, three categories were the highest proportion,which consumed 29.5%(gas), 30%(coal), and 29%( petrol). The figures for coal and gas, both experienced a minor increase by reaching 31% and 30%, but the petrol was only category that decreased.
The solar power and other sources were the least consumed energy sources 6.5% and 5% in 2000.Both categories showed minor increase,albeit minimally. However, both categories remained the least consumed products in both years.
The essay is logically organized and presents a clear overview of the information. The writer uses appropriate cohesive devices to link ideas and paragraphs. However, there are a few instances where the flow of information could be improved.
Suggestions
- Consider using a wider range of linking words and phrases to improve the flow of information.
- Ensure that each paragraph has a clear central topic and that all sentences in the paragraph relate to this topic.
The essay uses a good range of vocabulary and there is evidence of less common and idiomatic language. However, there are a few instances where word choice is not optimal.
The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms and there are few grammatical errors. However, there are a few instances where grammar and punctuation could be improved.
The essay addresses all parts of the task and presents a clear overview of the information. The essay also makes some comparisons where relevant. However, the essay could be improved by providing more specific details and by making more comparisons.
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- Try to provide more specific details and make more comparisons to fully answer the question.