The pie charts show the most common advantages and disadvantages of Bowen island according to a survey of visitors.

The pie charts show the most common disadvantages and advantages of Bowen Island, according to a survey of a visitors.
The pie charts compare the result of a questionnaire of travelers about both positive and negative points of Bowen Island. In general, high cost of living, out of four sectors, was referred to as one of the worst parts of the island while the inhabitants have been considered as a good one.
The high cost of accommodation sector has been chosen as the main debatable sector by a significant number of respondents accounted for 50 %. According to the survey, on the hand, either food quality or climate of the island were the next negative aspects of the list, and those makes up 25 %, respectively. The remaining 25% participants of the questionnaire mentioned that the citizens of the island pay attention less to the surrounding nature.
What respondents particularly liked about the Bowen Island was its people, they respected them for with 42 % of mentioning. The second the most advantage is linked with the natural features, which visitors left positive comments, about 35%. In comparison, two specific sectors such as good accommodation and culture each account for 12%.

6.5

The essay is logically organized and presents a clear overview of the information. However, there are some issues with the flow of information and the use of cohesive devices.

Suggestions

Use a variety of cohesive devices to improve the flow of information.
Ensure that each paragraph has a clear central topic and that all sentences in the paragraph relate to this topic.

The essay uses a good range of vocabulary and there is some evidence of collocation. However, there are a few awkward or incorrect word choices.

The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms and there is some use of passive voice and conditional sentences. However, there are a few grammatical errors and awkward constructions.

The essay provides a clear overview of the information and presents the key features of the data. The essay also makes some comparisons and identifies some trends. However, the essay could be improved by providing more detailed explanations and by avoiding some of the awkward or incorrect word choices.