The pie charts show the most common advantages and disadvantages of Bowen Island, according to a survey of visitors.
The pie charts present the results of a survey on the common benefits and drawbacks of Bowen Island. In general, it is clear that going to this island is more appreciated for its local people and the scenery, making up 42% and 35%, respectively. Disadvantages, on the other hand, are high living expenses and a sense of pleasure.
Two main pluses why people go to that island are the individuals in here and a beautiful landscape. One of these motives accounts for 42%, in contrast, another reason is view of it, makes up 35%. Not having to deal with finding flats is almost the same as culture, approximately at 11%. Nevertheless, a good culture is a little different from comfortable accommodation reached at 12%.
With regard to downsides, their main motive is the increased cost of living. 50% of respondents claimed high expenses are what make them frustrated. The second most common reason is amusement, with half of the former one. The latter is considerably two times smaller than the first (25%). The costs for living are by far the most dominant in all the cons of visiting this specific island. The remaining two discouragements are the quality of food and the weather. The poor quality of food accounts for 15%, whereas weather only makes up 10%.
The essay is logically organized and presents a clear central topic in each paragraph. However, there are some issues with the flow of information and the use of cohesive devices.
Suggestions
- Use a variety of cohesive devices to improve the flow of information.
- Ensure that each paragraph has a clear central topic and that all sentences in the paragraph relate to this topic.
The essay uses a range of vocabulary and there is some evidence of less common and idiomatic language. However, there are a few instances of awkward or incorrect word choice.
The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms and there are only minor errors. However, there are a few instances of awkward or incorrect sentence structure.
The essay addresses all parts of the task and presents a clear overview of the main trends, differences or stages. However, the essay could be improved by providing more specific details and examples.
Suggestions
- Include specific data from the pie charts to support your main points.
- Provide a more detailed analysis of the data, where possible.