The plans below show the layout of a university’s sports centre now, and how it will look after redevelopment. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The map below illustrates the figure of the sports centre of a university between the present and plans.
Overall, there will be a change thoroughly after it has been established in the future, such as the disappearance of twice outdoor courts and the tripling of the centre sizes.
At first glance, the sports centre, currently next to both outdoor courts on the outside, maintains a 25m swimming pool in the centre of the atrium, next to the changing room and seating, in front of the gym room and behind in the reception. Which is small but functional.
In contrast, it will triple the area and combine with two outdoor courts. It is clear that gym rooms double in size in the sizes to the right direction; the place of reception is extra with a sports shop and cafe in both corners. Notably, the locations of the seating, 25m pool, and changing room are the same, while in addition to both changing rooms in the southwest and southeast, the places of the two outdoor courts become the sports hall and leisure pool. There are also two dance studios on the east side. It is a huge change.
The essay lacks clear organization and coherence. Sentences are often fragmented, and there is limited use of cohesive devices.
Suggestions
- Use linking words to improve flow.
- Organize the essay into clear paragraphs.
- Ensure each paragraph has a clear main idea.
The essay uses a limited range of vocabulary, with some repetition and occasional errors.
The essay displays limited grammatical range with several errors in sentence structure and punctuation.
The essay addresses the task but lacks detailed comparisons and clear organization.
Suggestions
- Include more specific comparisons between the current and future layouts.
- Ensure all key features are clearly described and compared.