The plans show how a coastal land has developed into a coastal part
The illustrates show how coastal land changed into a coastal park.
Overall, before development the land was primaraly for agricultural engineering. However, after construction the area was changed into park where people can walk and relax in the beach.
In the former map we can see that there were road ran along the northern edge, in the middle part of the road leads to two farm buildings. The left-hand side this buildings situated the area foe animals and unused land the western part of the map. Additionally, there is agricultural land occupied most of the area in the east side. In the south we can see also cliffs, beaches and sea.
The area underwent significant modificantions including all parts of land. The farm bulidings have replaced with car park is adjoining with lake and woods both sides with a lot of trees around. The northeast part of the car park built brand-new cafe. Moreover, cliffs added the steps which leads to beach where visitors can play and sit. However there is areas including road and sea remained untouched.
The essay is logically organized and presents a clear central topic in each paragraph. However, there are some issues with the flow of information and the use of cohesive devices.
Suggestions
- Use a variety of cohesive devices to improve the flow of information.
- Ensure that each paragraph has a clear central topic and that all sentences in the paragraph relate to this topic.
The essay uses a sufficient range of vocabulary and there is evidence of some less common and idiomatic language. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and spelling.
The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms and there are some errors in grammar and punctuation, but these do not impede communication.
The essay addresses all parts of the task and presents a clear overview of the information provided. However, the essay could be improved by providing more detailed and specific information.
Suggestions
- Include specific details and data from the diagrams to support your overview.