The process of growing and preparing pineapples and pineapple products. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The flowchart demonstrates the growth of pineapples and the process of making products from pineapples and preparing them to ship to overseas.
Overall, this is a largely natural process comprising three main stages: growing pineapples and then manufacturing products from them and transporting them to countries. Additionally, this is both natural and man-made process.
Initially, the crowns of pineapples starts to germinate, they are usually up to 26cm and should be grown between 23-30 degree Celsius. After 7 months, they become so big and during this time, ethylene are sprayed to them to ripen them faster. Following 5 month, pineapples become ripe and they are usually up to 30cm and height about 2kg. Finally, they can be used to either make products or ship them to overseas.
The initial process starts with washing pineapples, then some of them are either exported to other nations or used to manufacture food products. To make pineapple juice, pineapples’ crowns cut along with pineapples are sliced. Once sliced, they are put into extractor, then juice is extracted from them, and ultimately packaged and can be sold in the supermarkets. To make canned pineapples, washed pineapples are sliced into half, with their crowns are separated. Afterward, they are cut into pieces and put into cans and can be sold in the supermarkets. Subsequently, washed pineapples are washed in wax and put in the bins. Once put, they are carried to large vessel and finally, transported to overseas.
The essay is logically organized and the progression of ideas is clear. However, there are some areas where the flow of information could be improved. The use of transition words and phrases is generally good, but there are a few instances where they could be used more effectively to guide the reader through the process.
Suggestions
- Use a variety of transition words and phrases to make the flow of information smoother.
- Consider using more cohesive devices to link the different stages of the process more clearly.
The essay demonstrates a good range of vocabulary and the use of some technical language. However, there are a few instances of awkward or incorrect word choice that could be clarified.
The essay demonstrates a good range of grammatical structures and is generally accurate. However, there are a few minor errors that could be corrected for clarity.
The essay provides a detailed description of the process of growing and preparing pineapples and pineapple products. The writer has clearly addressed the task, providing a step-by-step outline of the process from growth to export. However, the use of some vague language (‘they become so big’) could be clarified with more specific measurements or descriptions.
Suggestions
- Consider providing more specific language to describe the size and development of the pineapples during the growth process.