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the sales of six essential products in WeBuy in the first half of 2020

from January to June in 2020. Overall, there was a rise in sales of books, movies, cleaning supplies, medical supplies, and food and drinks, with food and drinks being the most popular. In contrast, electronics sales dropped, while clothing sales went up before returning to their starting point.
Food and drinks, and books and movies followed similar growth patterns. In January, books and movies sold 9,000 units, and food and drinks sold 15,000 more. Both categories increased slowly in February, with books and movies reaching 11,000 and food and drinks rising to 36,000. In March, food and drinks saw a big rise to 56,000, while books and movies grew steadily to 15,000. By April, books and movies increased sharply to 44,000, and food and drinks grew to 58,000. By June, food and drinks reached 60,000.
Cleaning supplies and medical supplies also had similar trends.Cleaning supplies started at 5,000 units in January, and medical supplies started at 10,000. By February, both reached 10,000. Medical supplies doubled to 20,000 in March, and cleaning supplies grew to 30,000 by May. By June, cleaning supplies increased to 50,000.
Electronics and clothing had different trends. Electronics began at 40,000 units in January, then dropped to 38,000 in February. Sales continued to fall, reaching 10,000 in May and 5,000 in June. Clothing sales rose from 20,000 in January to 30,000 in February, then grew slightly to 35,000 by April. However, sales dropped back to 20,000 in June.

7.5

The essay maintains a logical flow and structure, effectively organizing information about different product categories. However, some transitions between ideas could be smoother.

Suggestions
  • Use more linking words to improve transitions.
  • Ensure each paragraph has a clear topic sentence.
  • Avoid abrupt shifts between product categories.

The vocabulary is appropriate and varied, though it could be more precise in some areas.

The essay demonstrates a good range of grammatical structures with minor errors.

The essay effectively addresses the task, summarizing key trends and providing specific data. However, it could include more detailed comparisons.

Suggestions
  • Include more comparisons between categories.
  • Provide a brief overview of the graph at the beginning.