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The sales of six essential products in WeBuy in the first half of 2020

The line graph shows changes in the sales of six important items in WeBuy from January to June in 2020. Overall, there was a considerable increase in the sales of books and movies, cleaning supplies and toiletries, medical supplies and food ad drinks with the last category mentioned dominating the graph for the better part of the period. While electronic products saw their sales drop significantly, the trend was different in clothing – after rising markedly, the sale rate went down its original point.
Both books and movies and food and drinks followed a similar pattern of growth. Starting at approximately 35,the sales in books and movies increased marginally to 55 thousands in March. After that it witnessed a period of stable increases from April to December with staggering 60.Sales in the latter items started at 15, a figure that then climbed to 45 in March.In the remaining period this figure leveled off.
The same scenario was also observed in the categories – cleaning and medical supplies. Their figures grew from the first month to February , reaching 10. This was followed by a further increases to 50.
The remaining categories bucked the foregoing trends. The sales for electronics decreased to a just about 37 in February, while clothing saw their sales went up markedly with 30. In the other months of the year the reverse was true for clothing sales. The amount of electronics reduced noticeably until the end of the period.

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The essay is logically organized and presents a clear overview of the data. The use of cohesive devices is effective, and the progression of ideas is smooth. However, there are a few areas where the flow of information could be improved.

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  • Use a variety of cohesive devices to improve the flow of information.
  • Ensure that each paragraph has a clear central topic and that all sentences in the paragraph relate to this topic.

The essay uses a good range of vocabulary and there is evidence of less common and idiomatic language. However, there are a few instances where the choice of words could be improved.

The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms and there are few grammatical errors. However, there are a few instances where the choice of grammatical structures could be improved.

The essay addresses all parts of the task and presents a clear overview of the data. The essay also provides specific details to support the main points. However, the essay could be improved by providing a more detailed analysis of the data and by making more precise comparisons.

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  • Provide a more detailed analysis of the data and make more precise comparisons.
  • Use a wider range of structures to discuss the data.