The table and chart below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain the table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distabuted
The table and charts show informations about the police budget in 2017 and 2018 and also illustrate how the money was spent in these two years.
Overall, the budget for police slightly increased over the two years. The majority of the funds came from the national government, and most of the money was spent on salaries, while the proportion spent on technology rose slightly.
In 2017, the total budget was £304.7m, which increased a bit to £318.6m in 2018. National government was the main source, providing £175.5m in 2017 and £177.8m in 2018. Local taxes made up £91.2m in 2017 and raised to £102.3m in 2018, while other sources like grants stayed almost same at around £38m.
Regarding expenditures, salaries were the largest spending, accounting for 75% of the total in 2017, though it droped to 69% in 2018. On the other hand, spending on technology rose from 8% in 2017 to 14% in 2018. Spending on buildings and transport remained stable at 17% in both years.
The essay is logically organized and presents a clear overview of the information. The writer uses appropriate connectors to link ideas and paragraphs. However, there are a few areas where the flow of information could be improved.
Suggestions
- Use a variety of cohesive devices to improve the flow of information.
- Consider using more complex sentence structures to provide additional detail and context.
The essay uses a good range of vocabulary and there is evidence of less common and idiomatic language. However, there are a few instances of awkward or incorrect word choice.
The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms and there are only minor errors. However, there are a few instances of awkward or incorrect phrasing that could be improved.
The essay addresses all parts of the task and presents a clear overview of the information. The writer makes appropriate comparisons and provides relevant details. However, the essay could be improved by providing a more detailed analysis of the data and by making more specific comparisons.
Suggestions
- Provide a more detailed analysis of the data, including explanations for the trends and changes.
- Make more specific comparisons between the data, where appropriate.