The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed.
The pictures compare the police budget in 2107 with in 2018 in specific area of Britain. The table illustrates the sources of money, while the pie chart shows where the finances were spent.
Overall, in the table, while the incomes in 2018 were higher than that of in 2017, the greatest figure was the money taken from National government in both years. In the chart the money spent on buildings and transport was the same in both years, wheras the biggest figure, which is salaries, declined.
The essay presents information in a logical order but lacks clear linking phrases and transitions.
Suggestions
- Use linking words to connect ideas.
- Ensure each paragraph has a clear main point.
- Improve the flow between sentences.
The vocabulary is adequate but lacks variety and precision.
There are some grammatical errors and awkward sentence structures.
The essay addresses the task but lacks detail and precision in some areas.
Suggestions
- Include more specific data from the table and charts.
- Ensure all key features are covered.
- Provide clearer comparisons between the years.