The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed.
The table and diagrams illustrates the police budget in one area of Britian for 2017 and 2018. Whereas the table depicts the source of money, the bar charts gives information about its distribution.
Overall, it is evident that the National government and Local Taxes were the main means of money provision, while salaries were the ones that take the majority of money.
Regarding the table, National Government was accounted for 175.5 m in the first year, which then saw a slight increase to 177.8 m. The Local Taxes provided 91.2 m in 2017, going up to 102.3 m in the following year. When it comes to the Other sources it was distinguished only by half a million, with an improvement. Totally, the money collected in 2017 was 304.7 m while it was 318.6 m the next year.
With respect to the charts, in both years, salaries were the main dominant, with 75% in 2017 and 69% in 2018.
The essay is generally coherent and cohesive, with a logical progression of ideas. However, some transitions between sections could be smoother.
Suggestions
- Use linking words to improve flow.
- Ensure each paragraph has a clear main idea.
- Clarify comparisons between years.
The essay demonstrates an adequate range of vocabulary, but some words are misused or repetitive.
The essay has a range of grammatical structures, but contains several errors.
The essay addresses the task and provides an overview of the data, but lacks some detailed analysis and comparison.
Suggestions
- Include more detailed comparisons between the two years.
- Provide a clearer summary of changes in distribution.