The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The statistics show the total police outlay in years 2017 and 2018 in partial region of Britain and investments from different soirces while charts illustrates how it was divided. In general, total spending shown in table increased between given timeframe, while charts demonstrate some dynamic differences
As illustrated, the police’s budget escalated, the hugest source of investments in both of the years was Local government. Their sublimation raised from 175 millions of pounds to 177. However, Local donations had the highest growth, going up from 91 millions of pounds to 102 million (rising by 11 millions), while other sources of money (like grants) increased only for 0,5 of the million,
The payment for police employees decreased in the given period, going down from 75% to 69% from the total amount. Yet, Buildings and transport consumption remained stable with the 17%, while Technology outlays raised nearly twice of its original number, surging from 8 to 14% of the total amount
The essay presents information logically but lacks clear organization in some areas. Transitions between ideas are sometimes abrupt.
Suggestions
- Use clear linking words to connect ideas.
- Ensure each paragraph has a clear main idea.
- Improve the flow between sentences.
The essay uses a range of vocabulary, but there are some inaccuracies and repetitive phrases.
The essay contains several grammatical errors and awkward phrasing.
The essay addresses the task but lacks some details and clarity in the explanation of data.
Suggestions
- Include more precise data from the table and charts.
- Ensure all main features are clearly described.