The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given graphs provide the data about where the budget came from and its distribution in a British town in 2017 and 2018.
Overall, it is evident that the majority of income was mainly taken from three sources and all three saw an upward trend in 2018. Similarly, the money was distributed into three areas, most of it was spent to salaries.
Looking at incomes of the town, it earned most from national government in both 2017 and 2018, 175.5 and 177.8 million pounds relatively. It is noticeable that the revenue from taxation saw a significant increase, which was 91,2 million pounds in the first year and rose to 102.3 million next year, while National Government and Other sources did not witness such an increase.
In terms of expenditure, the most money was given to officers and staff as salaries in 2017, which was 75%. Since the next year more was spent on improvement of technologies, expenditure on salaries saw 6% decline. Finally, the same amount of money, 17%, was spent on construction and transport in both years.
The essay presents a clear overview of the data and makes some relevant comparisons. However, the structure could be improved for better flow and clarity.
Suggestions
- Use more linking words to connect ideas smoothly.
- Organize the information in a more logical sequence.
- Provide clearer topic sentences for each paragraph.
The vocabulary is appropriate but lacks variety. Some words and phrases are repeated, and there are minor inaccuracies.
The essay demonstrates a good range of grammatical structures with occasional errors.
The essay addresses the task, summarizing the main features and making some comparisons. However, it could include more detailed data analysis.
Suggestions
- Include more specific figures to support comparisons.
- Ensure all key features from the data are covered.
- Clarify the significance of changes in data.