The table and pie chart below show the number of research students in Australian universities in 2001 and 2010 .Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main feature ,and make comparisons where relevant
The table and pie chart illustrate the number of local students and international research students in Australian universities in 2001 and 2010. Overall, the total number of research students increased significantly over the 9 years, with a notable rise in international students. However, local students still constituted the majority, although their share decreased slightly.
In 2001, there were 38,848 research students, of which 33,657 were local students and 5,182 were international students. In 2010, the total significantly rose by 15,232 research students, of which 39,488 were local and 14,593 were international research students.
In 2001, local students represented 87%, and international research students represented the remaining 13%. Local students showed 44% male and 43% female representation. International students showed 9% male, with a 5% difference between male and female students.
In 2010, the share of local students dropped slightly to 86%, while the share of international students rose slightly to 14%. Local male students accounted for 38%, and female students accounted for 35%. Among international students, male representation rose to 12%, with a 3% difference between female and male students.
The essay is logically organized and presents a clear overview of the data. The information is sequenced in a way that makes it easy to follow the trends and make comparisons between the years and between local and international students. The use of cohesive devices is effective, with appropriate use of referencing and linking words that help to connect ideas and sentences.
Suggestions
- Consider using a wider range of linking words and phrases to further improve the flow of your writing.
The essay demonstrates a good range of vocabulary, with appropriate use of academic and statistical language. Words and phrases such as “illustrate,” “constituted,” “represented,” “increased,” and “decreased” are used effectively to convey the necessary information. The only minor issue is the inconsistent use of the term “local students,” which is used to refer to both the 2001 and 2010 data. It would be clearer to maintain consistency or provide a more detailed explanation in the context.
The essay demonstrates a good command of complex sentence structures, which are used effectively to convey detailed information. The grammatical accuracy is generally high, with only minor errors that do not detract from the overall clarity or readability of the writing. The use of passive voice is appropriate for the type of data presentation, further enhancing the grammatical range and quality of the writing.
The essay provides a detailed and accurate summary of the information presented in the table and pie chart. The writer has successfully identified the key features of the data and has made relevant comparisons between the different groups of students. The information is presented in a clear and logical manner, with the overall trends and changes effectively highlighted.
Suggestions
- Ensure that you maintain consistency in your terminology (e.g., “local students” vs. “local research students”) and that you provide clear explanations for all the data presented.