The table and pie charts below show the number of research students in Australian universities in 2001 and 2010.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The table and pie charts give information about the number of research students in Australian universities in 2001 and 2010. Overall, it can be seen that Local research students a dramatically rose International research students a minimally increased in Australian universities.
Focusing on local research students an enormously grew 33,657 in 2001 year and this was followed by a sharply increased 39,488 in 2010 year. International research students a noticeably declined 5,192 in 2001 year after which a significatly rose 14,593 in 2010 year total number of student a sharply rose 38,849 in 2001 after a dramaticaly increased 54,081 in 2010 year.
Overall, it saw pie charts local students a considerably rose .International students a minimally grew in Australian universities. However, local students a dramatically inceased 87% partly local male 43% and local female 44% in 2001 after which a gradually declined 73% in 2010 year. International students a moderately reduce 13% in 2001 after a gradually decreased 27% in 2010 year.
The essay lacks clear organization and logical progression. The information is not presented in a coherent manner, and there are issues with sentence structure that affect clarity.
Suggestions
- Organize the information logically, starting with an overview and then detailing each category.
- Use linking words and phrases to improve the flow of information.
- Ensure each paragraph focuses on a single main idea.
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, with several errors in word choice and form.
The essay contains frequent grammatical errors and awkward phrasing that impede understanding.
The essay attempts to address the task but fails to accurately summarize and compare the data. There is a lack of clear analysis and comparison.
Suggestions
- Focus on accurately summarizing the data presented in the table and charts.
- Include clear comparisons between the two years.
- Ensure all key data points are mentioned and analyzed.