The table below gives information about a restaurant's average sales in three different branches in 2016. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant
The graph presents information about the average sales of three different settings in 2016. Overall, Vancouver Georgia Street was relatively higher in all types of transactions and prices compared to other branches. It is also worth mentioning that each branch has its own popular item.
Vancouver Georgia Street was highly popular. In terms of the total number of transactions, it was 854 with a value of $10.69. All transactions have two types, eat-in and take-away, with 405 and 449, respectively. The most preferable food in this branch was chicken burger.
In contrast, in Vancouver Drake Street, the price of transaction was slightly lower, just $9.02. When it comes to customer orders, it was only 390, accounted as the lowest number compared to other branches, with 200 of them eat-in and others for take-away. There, chicken pasta was the most popular type of food.
Meanwhile, in Vancouver Dunsmuir Street, the price was much more affordable but relatively lower than other branches. It was just $5.61, with the higher number of sales compared to Drake Street’s branch (750 transactions). 358 of them were eat-in the branch, and 392 were related to take-away, while chicken wings were the most preferred type of food there.
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