The table below gives information on internet use in six categories by age group.
The table compares various age groups in terms of internet-based activities they are engaged in.
Overall, a higher proportion of people use the internet to access the news or to search for a product, although the latter one was exclusive to adults. In contrast, the use of the internet to download content or searching for people is comparatively lower among the age groups. Notabley, the majority of teens consume news or play virtual games on the internet.
Certain online activities are generally more popular than others. For instance, following the news is higher than 70% with all age groups, with 76% of teens and 30-year-olds using the Internet for this purpose. Although teens do not use the net for product research, this activity is also popular among adult age categories, particularly with the age group 40 (83%). Online shopping is another common activitiy that at least 60% of people from most age categories use the Internet for.
Online games and downloads were the activities popular among teens but not among adults. Secifically, 81% of teens use the online platforms for the former purpose, whereas 52% for the latter. Among adults, however, the percentage of people using the net for these reasons is comparatively lower: only 8-6% of the elderly download materials online.
The least popular activity is searching for people. Only 5% of teens do this activity online compared to 31% of 20 years old adults, which is the age category engaging in this activity most.
The essay is logically organized with clear progression. However, some transitions between ideas could be smoother.
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- Use more linking words to improve flow.
- Ensure each paragraph has a clear central idea.
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The essay demonstrates a good range of vocabulary, though some words are used inaccurately or repetitively.
The essay contains a variety of sentence structures with occasional grammatical errors.
The essay effectively addresses the task, providing relevant information and comparisons from the table.
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- Ensure all key data points are accurately represented.
- Avoid overgeneralizing the data.