The table below shows how the UK unemployed spent their time last year.
The table provides information about the time usage spend on various activities by UK unemployed individuals over the last year.
Overall, it is evident that, women were more active in housework, shopping , travelling and visiting friends while the men were diligent in job hunting , and gardening than women
Looking at the details, in the morning , 49% of women engaged with housework compared to 19% of men. Similarly, shopping also more common among women with 26% compared to 20% of men. Around 22% of time spent on job seeking among men while women were relativelt low at 16%. By contrast, gardening was predominantly men’s priority , with 14% while women were only 2%/
In the afternoons, the trends shifted slightly. Watching TV became a popular activity for both genders, though men (14%) edged out women (12%) in participation. Women’s involvement in housework dropped significantly from 49% in the morning to 21% in the afternoon, while men’s fell to just 7%. Gardening, while still more popular among men (13%), remained minimal for women (3%). Social activities like visiting friends or relatives increased for both groups, with 17% of women and 12% of men engaging in them.
The essay is logically organized and presents a clear overview. The use of cohesive devices is effective, and there is a good range of linking words. However, there are a few areas where the flow of information could be improved.
Suggestions
- Consider using a wider range of cohesive devices to improve the flow of information.
- Ensure that each paragraph has a clear central topic and that all sentences in the paragraph relate to this topic.
The essay uses a good range of vocabulary and there is some evidence of collocation. However, there are a few instances of awkward or incorrect word choice.
The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms and there is some variety in sentence structure. However, there are a few grammatical errors and awkward constructions.
The essay provides a clear overview of the information and makes appropriate comparisons. The key features are identified and supported with relevant data. However, the essay could be improved by providing more detailed analysis and making more specific comparisons.
Suggestions
- Provide more detailed analysis and make more specific comparisons.
- Use a wider range of structures to discuss the data.