The table below shows the number of cars made in three countries in 2003,2005,2009.
The table compares the number of cars produced in three countries from 2003 to 2009. Overall, while the car production in Argentina and in Thailand increased noticeably, the reverse was true for Australia. Moreover, Thailand stood out among other nations with consistently higher figures in each year, despite a decline in the final year.
Argentina and Thailand showed increases their car production. In 2003, 735,825 cars were made in Thailand, considerably more than those produced in Argentina, at 235,088. This disparity/discrepancy/gap/difference became even more pronounced in 2006, as the figure for Thailand saw a rise to a staggering 1,162,356 and that for Argentina increased to 352,759. In the final year, while the number of cars manufactured in Thailand saw a slight drop to 999,963, Argentina continued its trajectory, reaching its peak of 466,089.
Australia, on the other hand, bucked the trend. In 2003, it made 452,163 cars, a figure that then fell significantly to 341,268 in 2006. After another decrease, the number of cars produced in this country stood at just 245, 264 in the last year.
The essay is well-organized with a clear overview and logical progression. However, some transitions could be smoother.
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The essay demonstrates a good range of vocabulary with some variety in expression.
The essay uses a variety of grammatical structures with minor errors.
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