The table below shows the proportion of the workforce who are women and the percentage of managers who are women in five different countries. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The table illustrates the percent of the women employee and senior members of the workplaces in countries such as Australia, Egypt, Sri-Lanka, Japan and USA.
Overall, both Australia and the USA have high percentages of women in the workforce and managerial positions, with the USA slightly ahead in workforce participation. However, in Egypt the figures are the least in both. Japan takes the most workforce from women, while the figure of Sri-Lanka is the least from using women as senior.
The figure of women employees for Japan is the highest at 48% and figure for United States is lower by 2. The difference of figures Australia and Sri-Lanka is 1%, respectively 42% and 41%. The least figure is 20 and it is for Egypt.
The highest figures of senior part of workplace for Australia and USA, the figures are corresponded to each other and they have a large difference from other countries. The percentage of Japan, Egypt and Sri-Lanka are profoundly less than the higher ones, respectively 17%, 12% and 9%.
The essay presents information in a structured manner but lacks clarity in some comparisons and transitions.
Suggestions
- Use linking words to improve flow.
- Clarify comparisons between countries.
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The essay uses a limited range of vocabulary with some inaccuracies.
The essay contains several grammatical errors and awkward constructions.
The essay addresses the task but lacks detailed analysis and some comparisons are unclear.
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- Include more detailed comparisons.
- Ensure all key features are highlighted.