The table below shows the proportion of the workforce who are women and the percentage of managers who are women in five different countries. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The table illustrates the percentage of female employees and women in managerial positions in countries such as Australia, Egypt, Sri-Lanka, Japan and USA.
Overall, both Australia and the USA have high percentages of women in the workforce and managerial positions, with the USA slightly ahead in workforce participation. However, in Egypt the figures are the least in both. Japan has the highest percentage of women in the workforce, whereas Sri Lanka has the lowest percentage of women in managerial positions.
Japan has the highest percentage of female employees at 48%, followed closely by the United States at 46%. The difference of figures Australia and Sri-Lanka is 1%, respectively 42% and 41%. Egypt has the lowest percentage of female employees at 20%.
Australia and the USA have the highest percentages of women in managerial roles, significantly more than the other countries.The percentage of Japan, Egypt and Sri-Lanka are profoundly less than the higher ones, respectively 17%, 12% and 9%.
The essay is well-organized and presents information logically. However, some sentences could be connected more smoothly.
Suggestions
- Use linking words to improve flow.
- Ensure all comparisons are clear and relevant.
The vocabulary is appropriate and varied. However, some expressions can be improved for precision.
The essay demonstrates a good range of grammatical structures with minor errors.
The essay effectively summarizes the main features and makes relevant comparisons.