The table below shows the residential use of water in one country in 1988 and 2008.
The chart provides information about use of water by local people in one state. In the years 1988 and 2008.
Overall, use of water in bathroom, toilets and washing clothes in both years was almost simillar. However, itchen’s rate increased significantly also, garden’s experienced remarkable fall, by the next year.
In 1988, the share of bathroom was 22% and increased to 27%, by the next year. Moreover, use of water in kitchen section experienced notable increased to 13%.
In 1988, the washing clothes has the biggest share with 25%. By the next year, level of this section decreased by 22%. Also, the toilets figure declined to 4%. However, the gardens section experienced the biggest drop from 20% to 7%.
The essay lacks clear structure and logical flow. Some information is repeated or misplaced, and transitions between ideas are weak.
Suggestions
- Organize the essay into clear paragraphs with a logical flow.
- Use linking words to connect ideas.
- Ensure all parts of the data are described accurately.
The essay uses a limited range of vocabulary with some repetition. There are some errors in word choice.
The essay contains several grammatical errors and awkward sentence structures.
The essay attempts to describe the data but contains inaccuracies and lacks detail in some areas.
Suggestions
- Ensure all data points are accurately described.
- Provide a clearer overview of the main trends.
- Include all relevant information from the table.