the table below shows the residential use of water in one country in 1988 and 2008.
The table shows changes in the residential use of water in a single country from 1988 to 2008. Overall, there was a considerable change in the usage of water for daily needs, namely bathroom, toilets, washing clothes, kitchen and garden. Just two residential water were not decreased which were kitchen and bathroom.
Focusing on the increases first, only bathroom and kitchen increased. The proportion of water which used for kitchen begin with 16% in 1988, and this was followed by a noticeably rise to 29% in the 2008. The percentage of residential water used for bathroom accounted for 22% in 1988, after which it climbed to 27% in 2008.
Starting at 18%, toilets decreased to 14%. Garden also similar to this pattern was reduced substantially from 20% to 7%. And also, washing clothes showed 25% in 1988, but after 20 years this proportion decreased slowly to 22%.
The essay follows a logical structure but lacks smooth transitions between ideas.
Suggestions
- Use linking words to improve flow.
- Avoid abrupt shifts between topics.
- Provide a clear overview of the table.
The vocabulary is adequate but lacks variety and precision.
Several grammatical errors affect clarity and precision.
The response addresses the task but lacks detailed analysis and a clear overview.
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- Provide a clearer summary of the overall trends.
- Include more detailed comparisons and contrasts.