The table gives data on residental use of water in one country in 1988 and 2008.
The table illustrates the water usage for various houshold purposes in a particular country in the years 1988 and 2008. Overall, it is apparent that the vast majority of water was used for bathroom and washing clothes in both years, while the reverse trend was shown by remaining sectors.
Regarding the indicators in 1988, the disparity between the percentage of water usage for each category was relatively narrow. The extent of water used for gardens, bathroom and washing clothes exhibited nearly indentical percentages, ranging from 20% to 25%, which was slightly higher than that of kitchen and toilets, accounting for 16% and 18% respectively.
After a decade, several alterations occured. The percentage of water diverted to bathroom and kitchen had significantly increased to 27% and 29% each by 2008. The figures for toilets and washing clothes, conversely, declined by 3-4%, while the decrease in the water division to gardens was more drastic, with the 13-percent reverse change.
The essay is generally well-structured with a clear overview and logical progression of ideas. However, some sentences could be connected more smoothly.
Suggestions
- Use linking words to enhance flow.
- Ensure each paragraph has a clear main idea.
The vocabulary is appropriate and varied, but there are minor errors and repetitions.
The essay demonstrates a good range of grammatical structures with some minor errors.
The essay effectively addresses the task, providing a clear overview and detailed comparison of water usage across the years.