The table shows spending money to single person and couple retired in Australia for living convenient
The table shows the amount of money spent to single person and couple retired in Australia
for living convenient.
Overall,the main
amount of money spend
to main activities such as housing, leisure health and transport, clothing
things approximately half of them. Total amount illustrates va 247 dollars between them.
To begin, the table demonstrates a single retired person spend less money than married couples in every category. In this chart, renting house is in first stage with 184 dollars for single person. They spend 140 dollars for leisure. Other significant features such as health, transport, food and clothing 122, 10744, 50 dollars respectively.
Retired married pair also spend same amount of money with single person There is one exception moment, There are two people but they live in one house, Therefore, housing is on second with 794 dollars after leisure by 202 dollars. clothing and food roughly 50 percent of sigle person’s money.
Can you mark and give some advises
The essay has a logical flow of information and ideas. However, there are some areas where the use of cohesive devices could be improved for better clarity and understanding. The summary attempts to describe the data in a logical order, but the flow is somewhat confusing. Phrases like “first stage” and “on second” are unclear in this context. Clearer and more precise language is needed to describe the data and its implications.
Suggestions
- Use a variety of cohesive devices to improve the flow of information and make the relationships between ideas clearer.
The essay uses a range of vocabulary and there is some evidence of an attempt to use less common and/or more complex vocabulary. However, there are some inaccuracies and the meaning of some words and phrases could be clearer. The text uses some relevant vocabulary related to the topic (“retired person,” “married couples,” “living convenient”), but there are several instances of awkward or incorrect word choices and phrases (“spend to main activities,” “about 50 percent of sigle person’s money”). Refining the vocabulary for accuracy and appropriateness could improve the clarity and professionalism of the summary.
The essay makes an attempt to use a range of grammatical structures, but there are some errors and the meaning of some sentences is unclear. The summary attempts to use a range of grammatical structures but contains several errors that affect the clarity and readability of the text. Paying closer attention to grammatical accuracy, including correct verb forms and preposition use, would enhance the quality of the summary.
The essay provides a summary of the information presented in the table. The essay could be improved by providing more detailed analysis and by making some comparisons where relevant. The summary provides some relevant data from the table but lacks a comprehensive analysis and comparison of the different categories. Including more detailed analysis and comparisons would provide a more thorough understanding of the data.
Suggestions
- Include a more detailed analysis and comparison of the data provided in the table.