The table shows the number of international visitors arrivals came to nine different countries and the percentage changes between 2009 and 2010.
The table compares the changes in the figure for tourists visiting nine various countries in the years 2009 and 2010. The units are measures in millions.
Overall, the number of visitors in all countries experienced an upward trend, with the exception of France, a country which no change in visitors’ number was observed. Moreover, even though the US, Spain, the UK, and especially France stood out with the biggest number of visitors, the highest percentage increases were seen in Turkey, China, and Germany during the whole period.
Focusing on countries where were mostly visited, France took the lead with 76 million tourists in 2009, but this figure unchanged with 0% in the next year. There was observed a 1to 2 million growth in the number of people coming to the US, Spain, the UK, and Italy. Initially, they were 66 million (US), 55 million (Spain and UK), and 44 million (Italy). After a year, in 2010, these figures of visitors reached to 67, 56, 57, and 45 million with 1.5%, 1.8%, 3.6%, and 2.3% increases in these four countries.
By contrast, fewer numbers of tourists paid a visit to the remaining countries. Starting with 33 million in 2009, the number of visitors in Turkey considerably grew to 45 million in 2010 by showing 33% change. China hosted 22 million visitors in the initial year, after which it reached 34 million in 2010 with 55% increase. Germany showed the greatest growth with a staggering 109% in the number of visitors from 11 million ( 2009 ) to 23 million ( 2010 ).
The essay is logically organized and presents a clear overview of the main trends. The information is sequenced in a way that makes it easy to follow the comparison of the different countries. However, there are a few areas where the flow of information could be improved.
Suggestions
- Use a wider range of linking words to improve the flow of information.
- Consider using more varied sentence structures to introduce and explain the data.
The essay uses a good range of vocabulary and there is evidence of some less common and idiomatic language. However, there are a few instances of awkward or incorrect word choice.
The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms and there are only minor errors. However, there are a few instances of awkward or incorrect sentence structure.
The essay provides a clear overview of the main trends and presents relevant data to support the comparisons. However, the essay could be improved by providing more detailed analysis and by making sure that all data is accurately reported.
Suggestions
- Provide a more detailed analysis of the data and make sure that all information is accurately reported.