The table shows the proportion of fifty-year-old adults who were never married over five decades in Japan. The chart represents Japanese marriage and divorce rates from 1970 to 2016.
The diagrams present information about marriage rates in Japan. While the table illustrates how the percentage of unmarried 50-year-old adults changed over five decades, 1970-2010, the line graph represents the changes in marriage and divorce numbers from 1970 to 2016.
Overall, it is readily apparent that the proportion of 50-year-old Japanese adults exhibited a consistent increase over the given period. Meanwhile, opposite trends were observed in marriage and divorce rates, with marriage rates showing an overall decline.
According to the table, there was a continuous incline in the proportion of adults who were never married in Japan. Standing at a meager 2 percentage-point in 1970, this figure then reported a doubling the following decade. The third decade saw further increase to 7 percentage-point, which eventually more than doubled with a staggering 15 percentage-point in the final decade.
The analysis of marriage and divorce portrayed a reversed pattern. Although the number of marriages commenced the period with an impressive 1.000.000, it fell significantly to 600.000 in 2016. As for the divorce rates, the number showed a doubling, increasing from the initial 100.000 to approximately 230.000 at the end of the span.
In summary, it is sensible to conclude that over given period, the Japanese marriage rates continued to decline, giving rise to the quantity of divorce cases.
The essay is logically organized and presents a clear overview of the information. The use of cohesive devices is effective, and there is a good balance between the description of the table and the chart.
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- Consider using a wider range of linking words and phrases to show more variety.
The essay uses a wide range of vocabulary and there is evidence of less common and idiomatic language. The vocabulary is used appropriately with only minor errors.
The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms and there are few grammatical errors. Those that do exist are minor and do not detract from the overall clarity of the essay.
The essay addresses all parts of the task and presents a clear overview of the main trends, differences or stages. The information is accurately selected and effectively compares the data.
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- Make sure to accurately interpret the data and provide clear and detailed analysis.