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The values that we learn from our parents and family have greater influence on our future success than knowledge and skills we learn at school. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

There is a notion that the values that children learn in a family have got a more significant effect on their future success than knowledge and skills they acquire at school. Although this statement can be true to some extent, I believe school education can teach more practical knowledge that can be applied in professions and the significance of the skills they develop can never be matched.
Indeed, home environment has a great influence on our development as an individual. Parents can teach the true values of life and relationships and many various traits that children need in their future life when they start their own family. These are especially necessary in today’s world, where the true meaning of life and family ties are very often disrupted. Having acquired those values, people may form more successful realtionships and become well-rounded members of society.
I, however, argue that school plays a more remarkable role in preparing the person for future life. In order for people to succeed in life, whether by career accomplishments or social contributions, individuals need practical knowledge that they are able to use in their occupation or in anything they do. All the subjects at school that students are required to study can give them a wealth of such knowledge that can serve as an asset. Therefore, school education has a profound effect on one’s success.
Furthermore, children have the opportunity to develop many useful skills at school. Students spend a great deal of time interacting with their peers from many different backgrounds and participating in a wide range of activities at school.This, in turn, sharpens their soft skills, such as communication, public speaking, digital literacy or language skills, enabling them do a number of different things in multiple future endeavors.
In conclusion, while people may learn valuable lessons from their parents and family that can prove to be useful in several spects of life, I am of the opinion that school education contributes more to one’s success as it teaches much more useful knowledge and provides students with a chance to improve their skills.

7.5

The essay is logically organized and ideas are connected well. The introduction and conclusion are clear and related to the topic. However, there are a few areas where the flow of ideas could be improved.

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The essay uses a wide range of vocabulary and there is evidence of less common and idiomatic language. However, there are a few instances of awkward or incorrect word choice.

The essay uses a wide range of complex structures. There are a few minor errors, but they do not impede communication.

The essay addresses the task effectively, presenting a clear position throughout the response. The essay provides relevant, extended and supported ideas.

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