There have been some problems with the public transport you use to commute daily. Write a letter to the manager of the public transport company. In your letter: -describe the problems -explain how these problems are effecting you and others -suggest what could be done about it.
Task 2
According to some data, problems related to overpopulation are increasing significantly in many cities. Some encouraging businesses and individuals are moving to rural areas by the government. In my opinion, there are many advantages of this trend than disadvantages.
On the one hand, the number of population is increasing rapidly day by day in the world. It cause to lack of spaces for living and crowded areas. And also the government have a problem with providing population. Therefore some governments are now encouraging businesses and individuals to move to other cities or rural areas. As a result, it can reduce these problems. In addition the government can provide well population with all things.
On the other hand, some people consider that it is not good solution for people. Because in this situation, people face to some problems which include finding new space for living, moving issues and costs. Besides they have a work place in this city and they lose their work and it can cause to finding new work.
Your letter presents information and ideas but they are not arranged coherently, and there is no clear progression in terms of logical sequencing. You do use some basic cohesive devices, but these are sometimes inaccurate or overly repetitive. Furthermore, your letter lacks a clear structure, which makes it difficult to discern between the introduction, body, and conclusion.
Suggestions
- Use a variety of cohesive devices correctly.
- Ensure each paragraph has a clear central topic and follows logically from the previous one.
The vocabulary you use is basic and sometimes repetitive or inappropriate for the task. There are also several issues with word formation and spelling that can make your text difficult to understand.
Your letter uses a limited range of grammatical structures, with only rare use of more complex forms such as subordinate clauses. While some sentences are correctly formed, there are numerous grammatical errors that can significantly impact the readability of your letter. You also sometimes struggle with correct punctuation, which further affects the clarity of your message.
Your letter responds to the task only in a minimal way, and the format you have chosen is sometimes inappropriate. You do present a position, but it is unclear and lacks strong justification. While you introduce some main ideas about the impacts of overpopulation and government policies, these ideas are difficult to identify and understand due to the lack of clear organization and development.
Suggestions
- Ensure that each paragraph directly addresses the essay prompt.
- Develop each point with specific examples and evidence.