There have been some problems with the public transport you use to commute daily. Write a letter to the manager of the public transport company. In your letter: • describe the problems • explain how these problems are affecting you and others • suggest what could be done about it
Dear Sir or Madam,
I am writing to concern about the public transport services. I have not arrived to may workplace on time by public transport. I am hoping you can understand me correctly.
I have used the public transport services for two years, I could always arrive to my work on time. But one day, I didn’t arrived to my work on time and my maneger was angry from me fro late and I stressed, so I decided to inform you about this information and more people are suffering these conditions as me. In addition, passengers cannot use the public transport soon as increasing of issues. I suggest that you must control the drivers for work with time and check their relationship with passengers or you can find the new customers. I am hoping that these issues will be solved by you.
I am hope you can solve issues and I feel that you can give the helping hold me.
Best regards,
Eshboyev Aslbek.
The letter is somewhat organized, but the flow of ideas is not entirely clear. The writer jumps from one idea to another without smooth transitions, and the letter could benefit from better paragraphing. The introduction is too brief and does not clearly state the purpose of the letter. The conclusion is also weak and does not effectively wrap up the letter.
Suggestions
- Use a clear structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.
- Ensure smooth transitions between paragraphs by using linking words or phrases.
- Provide a strong introduction that clearly states the purpose of the letter, and a conclusion that summarizes the main points.
The letter uses a basic range of vocabulary, but there are several instances of incorrect word usage and awkward phrasing. The writer uses a limited vocabulary, which is evident in the repetitive use of certain words and phrases. Some words are used incorrectly, which affects the clarity and professionalism of the letter. There are also issues with word choice and collocation, such as “give the helping hold me.”
The letter contains several grammatical errors that hinder readability and detract from the overall quality of the writing. There are multiple errors in verb tense, article usage, and preposition use. Some sentences are incomplete or poorly structured, making it difficult to understand the intended meaning.
The letter partially addresses the task by describing the problems with public transport and suggesting potential solutions. However, the writer does not provide enough detail or specific examples to fully support their points. The letter also does not effectively engage the reader or maintain a consistent tone throughout. The writer does not clearly state their main points, and the letter lacks a structured argument.
Suggestions
- Provide more specific examples to support your points.
- Ensure that each paragraph focuses on a single main idea and is clearly linked to the overall argument.
- Clearly state your main points in the introduction and provide a structured argument with supporting details in the body paragraphs.
- Maintain a consistent tone throughout the letter and ensure that all points are relevant to the topic.