There have been some problems with the public transport you use to commute daily. Write a letter to the manager of the public transport company. In your letter: • describe the problems • explain how these problems are affecting you and others • suggest what could be done about it
Dear Sir or Madam,
The reason why I am addressing you is to complain about the public transport that you work as a manager.
I have been suffering from this issue, since I applied for my current job. The problem with public transport is the frequently changing cost of the bus.
Owing to the high price of public transport, I and my colleagues face difficulties. For instance, we get on the bus to save us from further expenditures, but the price between the taxi and bus is similar. Therefore, we encountered challenges to pay the fee of the bus and we have no money to separate for our daily expenditures.
I will appreciate it, if you provide us with low costs and quality buses.
Thank you for your time and consideration. I hope that my complaint will contribute to improvements in your establishment. I look forward to your response as soon as possible.
Best regards,
Jasur Sulaymonov.
The letter is logically organized and the progression of ideas is clear. However, there are some issues with the use of cohesive devices and the overall cohesion of the letter. The letter follows a logical structure, but the use of cohesive devices is sometimes inaccurate or missing, making the argument less clear. Additionally, the conclusion could be more effective in summarizing the main points and clearly stating the expected outcome.
Suggestions
- Use a variety of cohesive devices to ensure smooth transition between ideas.
- Make sure to fully develop your points and provide sufficient detail to support your arguments.
The letter uses a sufficient range of vocabulary and there is evidence of some skill in the use of less common items. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation. The letter uses a sufficient range of vocabulary to convey the message, but there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation. For example, “I and my colleagues face difficulties” could be rephrased as “my colleagues and I face difficulties,” and “we have no money to separate for our daily expenditures” could be rephrased as “we do not have enough money to cover our daily expenses.”
The letter uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms and there are some errors in grammar, punctuation and spelling, but they do not impede communication. The letter uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are some grammatical errors and punctuation issues that can hinder understanding. For example, “The reason why I am addressing you is to complain about the public transport that you work as a manager” could be rephrased as “I am writing to complain about the public transport managed by your company.”
The letter addresses the task and provides a clear position throughout the response. However, the letter could be more specific in providing details about how the public transport issues are affecting the writer and others. The letter clearly identifies the issues with the public transport system and provides a clear position, but the argument could be more fully developed with additional details and examples. For instance, the writer could provide specific examples of how the high cost of public transport has affected their daily life and the lives of their colleagues.
Suggestions
- Include specific examples to support your points and make your argument more persuasive.
- Provide more details about how the high cost of public transport affects the daily lives of you and your colleagues.