Today, many people do not know their neighbors. Why is this? What can be done about this?

Knowing those from the same neighbourhood is nowadays taken for granted by people. Hectic lifestyle and flexible job opportunities are the reasons responsible for this situation, where community-related gatherings and social media platforms may be possible ways to make people more aware of their neighbours.
Current financial instabilities all over the world are influencing working life of people giving them no chance for interactions neither with their friends, nor their neihbours. The majority have taken up nine-to-five jobs in order to make ends meet and fulfil their basic necessities leaving no time to interact with even neighbouring people but to rest after a long working day. In several cases, these full-time jobs are followed by an additional shift, especially when it come to families with lower income, which constitute a large part of society.
Furthermore, the tendency of working in freelance has made it possible for people to be more flexible in terms of location, where the role of neighbour is not of a big importance. With the advances in technology people now can work more freely, choosing place and time to be busy as in the case with IT-related jobs. People of different technological areas, be it graphic designing or software developing, have chance to relocate and can work remotely provided that they accomplish their tasks on time.
Despite the reasonable reasons behind the trend, certain actions can be taken for people to know their neighbours better. Organizing monthly gatherings in form of celebration or meeting is one of the options to apply for better social link. Discussion of local problems and parties are proven methods of setting up relationship within the neighbourhood. Not only does it increase the rate of networking within the people, but also the established warm relationships may help to reduce crime rates, as people will be more careful of people living next door. This practice is widely recognized and conducted in Uzbekistan, where several neighbouring streets are united in one ‘mahalla’, local authoritative centre, thus making the society a better and safer place to live.
Another option for making community more familiar with one another is through social networking websites, where there is greater possibility of interaction. This opportunity guarantees immediate success since all the people nowadays use gadgets, giving it priority for communicating as compared to face-to-face chats. Setting up online communities or groups for more fruitful conversations is very common trend in chatting applications such as Telegram, which is mostly popular in post-Soviet countries. The globally recognized social networking platform Facebook, has also introduced grouping settings according to the neighbourhood people belong to, making it easier for those living in a certain area to find each other and exchange mutual views and problems.
In conclusion, underlying reasons of people not knowing their neighbours – dense schedule or flexibility in moving around – can be easily solved with the help of community events and online networking websites.

8.0

The essay is logically organized and ideas are connected well. The introduction and conclusion are clear and relevant. However, there are a few instances where the flow of ideas could be improved. The essay is well-structured, with a clear introduction, body paragraphs that each discuss a different solution, and a conclusion that restates the main points. You use transition words effectively to guide the reader through your argument (e.g., “Furthermore,” “Another option,” “In conclusion”), contributing to a smooth flow of ideas. To further improve coherence, ensure that each paragraph focuses on a single main idea and that the ideas within paragraphs are logically ordered and clearly connected to each other and to the main topic.

Suggestions

Try to use a wider range of linking words to improve the flow of ideas.

The essay demonstrates a good command of a broad lexical repertoire. A wide range of vocabulary is used appropriately and accurately. You demonstrate a good command of vocabulary, with a variety of terms related to the topic (e.g., “Hectic lifestyle,” “flexible job opportunities,” “community-related gatherings,” “social networking websites”). Your use of language is clear and effective, contributing to a thorough discussion of the topic. To further enhance your lexical resource, consider incorporating more varied and precise vocabulary to avoid repetition and to more accurately convey your intended meaning.

The essay uses a wide range of complex structures. The majority of sentences are error-free. The essay showcases a variety of grammatical structures with a high level of accuracy. You use a range of sentence structures effectively, from simple to complex sentences, and your use of grammar is generally accurate, contributing to the clarity and coherence of your writing. To further improve, pay attention to the consistency of verb tenses and ensure that pronouns are clearly referent to avoid any confusion.

The essay addresses the task fully. The writer presents a clear position and supports it with relevant examples. The essay effectively addresses the prompt by discussing the reasons behind the trend of people not knowing their neighbours and suggesting solutions to address this issue. You present a clear introduction and conclusion, and your ideas are well-developed and supported with relevant examples. To further enhance your response, consider providing more specific examples or data to support your arguments.