Today news plays a crucial role in people's lives and more significantly influences people than before. Why is this case? It is a positive or negative development?
In today’s world, current events play a significant role in people’s lives and have a greater influence on individuals than ever before. This shift has happened by news printer. If printer wants public something fake or to make someone look bad it can be very easy for him. While news influences people more enormously has some negatives, but I prefer it’s also has positives.
On the one hand, people always want to knowing what’s going on in earth, while, this should get more and more people being on online with internet. This maybe able to reveal people’s indifference. For example, in dining room people always with their phone because the current events turned into their life, and it can cause some problems down the line with your stomach or your body because you don’t know what you were eating.
And if you are one of the celebrities there can be wrong news about you which published by information manipulators which can cause a little bit of frustration about you in others mind and it maybe would built a wrong or mistaken ideas in people’s mind.
On the other hand, there is a lots of advantages of news plays a huge role in your life. Which can be affected your life appropriately. For example, you always know what’s going on in the world right know with one search, and if you randomly read or watch information something you don’t expect to saw there, but you randomly get the something new into your mind. And it’s like the cetchup when you get something new in your mind you want that kind of articles again and again, also i prefer this type of current affairs, while others chose to be professional at some professions, i prefer to be Omniscient (who has a knowledge of everything).
To summarize, in our world new information have getting a role, which can effected to huge range of people than ever. Based on information provided, I think it is a positive development, due to this developments we are one touch away from all news in the world.
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