The two maps compare the town center as it was in 1990 and it is now.
Overall, the area has experienced substantial transformations, with the notable developments in apartment blocks and a shopping mall. while showcasing key facilities- a childcare center, a town hall, a library, street names, a park and a bank in the north-east corner, which have been preserved, whilst café has been completely replaced.
In 1990, the park and the town hall were located at the center, between which the library was situated. The café, located to the north of the park, contained several services, including a newsagent, grocer, baker, and the butcher. A childcare center was positioned behind café. The bank in the northeastern corner, while the second bank located on the left-hand side of the town center. Houses occupied the southern and southeastern parts of the area.
Since then, the town has been modernized, the shopping mall has been built to the north instead of shareholders’ café. The east bank was converted into a café. Houses were demolished to make way for apartment blocks. There have been constructed new crosswalks in the town center. The childcare center, the park, the library, the town hall, the bank which has been locate in the northern-east, street names were not subject to change.
The essay is logically organized and presents a clear overview of the changes. However, the use of some cohesive devices could be improved for better flow and clarity.
Suggestions
- Use a variety of cohesive devices to improve the flow of information.
- Ensure that each paragraph has a clear central topic and that all sentences in the paragraph relate to that topic.
The essay uses a range of vocabulary and there is evidence of less common and idiomatic language. However, some words and phrases could be used more accurately.
The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms and there are only minor errors. However, there is room for improvement in the use of articles and prepositions.
The essay addresses all parts of the task and presents a clear overview of the information. However, the essay could be improved by providing more specific details and by ensuring that all information is accurately represented.
Suggestions
- Include specific data or detailed descriptions of the changes to provide a more comprehensive analysis.
- Ensure that all information is accurately represented and clearly communicated.