Two pie charts
The two pie charts compare the proportion of the main sources of energy for USA between 1980 and 1990
Overall, it is clear that the percentages of oil and natural gas were the highest in the first year while the percentage of hydroelectric power was the smallest
In 1980, Oil and natural gas were the7 highest percentage with 42% and 26% the most used to make energy for USA, this was followed by coal, at 22%. In first year the two figures( hydroelectric power and nuclear power )showed similar percentage with 5%
In 1990, the percentage of oil had declined to 33% but maintained the highest percentage, this was followed by coal, at 27%. The percentage of natural gas saw a decline of 1% in 1990. The hydroelectric power maintained the similar situation with 5% while nuclear power of energy had increased a slightly to 10% over a decade
The essay has a logical structure but lacks smooth transitions between ideas. Some sentences are fragmented or awkwardly connected.
Suggestions
- Use more linking words to connect ideas smoothly.
- Ensure each paragraph has a clear central idea.
- Avoid repetition of similar phrases.
The vocabulary is adequate but somewhat repetitive. Some phrases could be more precise.
The essay contains several grammatical errors, affecting clarity. Sentence structures are often repetitive.
The essay addresses the task but lacks detailed analysis and precise comparisons.
Suggestions
- Include more detailed comparisons between the two years.
- Provide a clearer overview of changes over the decade.