Waste company tonnes
The graph illustrates the amounts if waste produced by three companies over a period of 15 years
Tha main fact stand out are that the company C was increasing the 15 years
Firstly,the company A in 2000 very popular than the others and company a around 15 years a decrease.Company B in 2000 to 2005 increase and during 10 years very rapidly decrease.And last one Copmany C the lowest and 2015 the most popular than the others.
Secondly, Company A 2000 12 tonnes but in during 2015 8 tonnes Company B the tonnes increase to 10 tonnes.However, during 2015 vaery rapifly decrease, the last one Copmany C 4 tonnes A climb to 10 tonnes in 2015.Another interesting point is that in 2000 most popular company A but Company B while company b was hanging, it fell downwards and the last one is Company B most popular than the others in 2015
The essay has a basic structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. However, the organization of ideas is not clear, and there is no logical progression in the discussion. The use of cohesive devices is inconsistent and sometimes incorrect, making it difficult to follow the flow of information.
Suggestions
- Use linking words and phrases more consistently to show the relationships between ideas.
- Make sure each paragraph has a clear central topic and that all sentences in the paragraph relate to this topic.
The vocabulary used is basic and sometimes repetitive. There are several spelling errors and incorrect word forms that detract from the overall clarity and effectiveness of the communication. More varied and precise vocabulary related to the topic of waste production and environmental impact could enhance the essay.
The essay contains a variety of grammatical structures, but there are numerous errors that affect the clarity and readability of the text. Issues include incorrect use of articles (e.g., “the company A”), misuse of prepositions (“in during 2015”), and overall awkward sentence construction.
The essay attempts to describe the changes in waste production by three companies over 15 years. However, the task is not fully achieved due to unclear descriptions, repetitive content, and grammatical errors. The essay lacks specific details and comparisons between the companies over the given period, which are crucial for a full Task 1 performance in the IELTS exam.
Suggestions
- Provide a more detailed comparison of the companies’ waste production over the 15-year period.
- Include specific figures and percentages to illustrate the changes in waste production more clearly.
- Ensure that each point made is directly relevant to the data presented in the graph.