With rising concerns about environmental degradation, some argue that the government should hold individuals accountable for their environmental impact. Do you agree or disagree?
Nowadays public awareness about ecological problems is rising in unparalleled way, and there are some people who believe that to prevent further development of the problem government should make all accountable for the damage they cause to the nature. While this proposal might work out well, I believe that this kind of issues should be collaboratively with all countries since environmental problems affect all equally.
On the one hand, the offer could have very positive results, if it were applied by the governments. Factories, one of the most air polluting institutions, are often reluctant to see the pollution they contribute to the environment. This is usually the case because this type of factories is not regulated by the authority, leaving everyone judging their own decisions themselves. Thus, making everyone accountable for their own actions could hinder degradation as people would be cautious of legal consequences coming from not following the regulation.
Conversely, this proposal will not always be appliable since problems such as: global warming, air pollution and soil degradation are international problems. An environmental problem occurring in a country cannot stay as a local because it will have an effect to other countries as well. Taking a resent fire in Los Angels, as an example, we can see that this fire had a negative repercussion to the neighbor countries as well, limiting the fresh air. Therefore, these issues are global and should be handled accordingly.
In conclusion, as people’s understanding of environmental problems is increasing, some suggest that making everyone responsible for the actions is the best way to tackle the problem. Although this may change the situation marginally, an international coordinated approach, as I think, can change the situation.
The essay is logically organized and the ideas are connected well. The introduction and conclusion are clear and the body paragraphs are well-structured. However, there are a few areas where the flow of ideas could be improved.
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